People today spend too much time to pay attention to the personal lives of celebrities such as entertainers or famous people.
Many people these days spend too much time to pay attention to the personal lives of celebrities such as entertainers of famous people. There are some reasons why I agree with this statement.
The quantity of time to spend to pay attention to the personal lives of celebrities increases recently. Developed technology such as fast and handful internet and smartphone changes our of daily life. And it makes us always see what celebrities do through our smartphone easily. Besides, the paths that we can show ourselves are larger and easier. Easier we can reveal our daily life, more we show ourselves and it brings our acquirement to show ourselves better. We start to pay attention to how we ourselves are shown to others, as well as how others are shown. Celebrities are one of the groups that we pay attention a lot.
Second, common sense says that there are a lot of people who addict using smartphone in our daily life. Smartphone has a big addition, so it is hard to keep ourselves from using it a lot. We can see the people who try to do not use a smartphone a lot. In my case, I always regret using smartphone without taking a rest better. Most of things that I do with smartphone are seeing SNS of celebrities. The problem of addiction to a smartphone is already serious to our society. That is why I think people today spend “too much” time to pay attention to the personal lives of celebrities.
Considering the quantity of time to spend to pay attention to the celebrities and seriousness of the problem of addition to a smartphone, we can say that these days many people spend a lot of time to pay attention to the personal lives of celebrities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the things') or simply say ''Most things''.
Suggestion: Most of the things; Most things
...martphone without taking a rest better. Most of things that I do with smartphone are seeing SN...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, second, so, well, i think, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61616161616 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75478495368 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 212.727598566 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424242424242 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 433.8 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.1160784035 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6470588235 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4705882353 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41393617734 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150278810377 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.222844659445 0.0737576698707 302% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329756895567 0.150856017488 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159581210949 0.0645574589148 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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