What’s more crucial for teenager to focus on just one specific activity or different kinds of activities? Considering the phase of development, it’s better to experience various activities in the teen. Because they are supposed to understand themselves and need to improve their abilities.
To begin with, they’re in the period that they should search their interest and know what they can do well or not. Before deciding what they want to be or what they want to do in the future, they need more time and experiences to find their character and interest. Through kinds of activities, teenagers would know themselves more. In my case, I tried a lot when I was teenager. At that time, I was just interested in many kinds of thing such as baking cookies or bread, playing piano and swimming. So I tried them and I found that I like to make something with hands and I really don’t have a great ability about music and sports. If I did not anything when I was a teenager, I would not find what I like and what I cannot de well.
Next, taking part in kinds of activities helps teenagers improve their overall abilities. They should develop their physical skills as important as their logical abilities. Doing various kinds of activities can offer many chances for teenager to develop their abilities. For example, teenagers playing piano can develop their musical perspective, parts of brain, and their muscles of fingers. They also can learn about how to swim and exercise when they do in sports classes. If they participate in a book club, they can learn about more information. They’re a good way for teenager to grow up in various aspects.
To sum up, I argue that for teenagers, taking part in more various activities is a better decision. They can understand themselves easily when they experience activities in different fields. They can get more change to develop their abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 432, Rule ID: MANY_KINDS_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'things'?
Suggestion: things
... I was just interested in many kinds of thing such as baking cookies or bread, playin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, so, well, for example, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86728395062 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66801484839 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493827160494 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7263969494 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.85 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161400911356 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633475243806 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692342617545 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124553083139 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485105731383 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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