Essay topics: Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples
<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">The summer holiday is always precious for college students, and properly utilizing it could benefit students a lot. Currently, there is a heated debate on the arrangement of summer vacations. Some people would like to become volunteers and make a contribution to the society, I prefer to take an extra course for it can improve my interpersonal ability and give me a competitive edge during interviews.
To begin with, an extra course could help students become more sociable. Tasks are indispensable for most lectures, and some of them are cooperative. Thus, these assignments create an ideal atmosphere to talk and work closely with teammates in order to achieve the common goal. Especially when we meet a dilemma, we need to express our ideas clearly and listen to others carefully. During this progress, interpersonal skills could be sharpened and amounts of friendship could be harvested. We all know that “Friendship can multiply joy and divide sadness”. Just take my friend Oliver as a good example. We felt the differences from the outside. However, in a summer lecture, we were occasionally arranged into the same group. It was till then that we had the first conversation. At first, some small conflicts did burst out due to different backgrounds, but we learned to communicate patiently rather than disputing, as every knowledge we know was based on previous personal experience. After running in period, we realized that we actually shared so much in common. What’s more, we worked much more efficiently than before. Had I not participate that summer course, I could not master the ability of developing friendship with different people.
Besides, attending an extra course is good for interviews. This kind of lecture provides an opportunity for students to enrich their knowledge from another aspect. To be versatile is vital in the real life, as it marks learning abilities. The more you learn in the same time, the stronger skills you own. As to the companies, they are definitely willing to hire a more talented employee. For instance, my major is computer science, but I attended a business summer school so as to broaden my horizon. It was a little difficult for a novice, like me, without any common sense. It consumed me a lot of time and efforts to overcome various barriers. Consequently, every effort pays back. When I was asked to talk about the future of artificial intelligence in the interview, I claimed my point from not only a theological view but also a marketing angle. Thanks to the previous attempt, various perspectives impressed the interviewer and won me the internship. Had I not shown diverse views by participating in that summer course, I probably lost this precious internship.
Admittedly, picking up a volunteer work does produce a positive effect on the society to some extent. Nonetheless, I prefer to learn some practical skills. These skills can enhance my capability and help me make a huger contribution in the future. By now, I can only finish some extremely basic work. In contrast, if I utilize these time to explore some new fields, I might be able to engage in something big. Compared to a time-consuming volunteer, I choose to invest the future.
In all, students would benefit from a different taste of course much more than volunteering.</span><br>
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 473, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...but I attended a business summer school so as to broaden my horizon. It was a little dif...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, then, thus, as to, for instance, in contrast, kind of, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2838.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1693989071 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2211527281 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 899.1 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6771673601 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8333333333 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0744032870807 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0173642121358 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309015538327 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0566159519931 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393233323179 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 86.8835125448 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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