The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment.
Have you ever gotten a cough caused by the smoggy air? Have you ever imagined the food you eat might be irrigated by the polluted river? Recently, there has been a hot discussion about whether purifying environment is the best way of human health improvement. In my opinion, a neat environment is indeed crucial significant. However, it does not mean cleaning environment is the first choice to make citizens healthier.
To begin with, we have to admit that most of the current diseases have been caused by serious environmental problems. For instance, air pollution leads to the increasing numbers of lung cancers; water contamination threatens the survival of animals and human beings. Therefore, cleaning the environment can in no case be ignored if we want to live longer and healthier. The health improvement in my hometown could be cited as a good example. It used to be an industrial city, with an extremely unfriendly environment. The sky was covered by thick smog; the rivers were dyed with colorful streams; and the soil absorbed overdosed chemical metals. Local clinics were always occupied by citizens with various diseases. However, things are quite different now since the government began to take stern measurements to recover the ecosystem. Sky, rivers, and soils are now in a quite better status, and more importantly, local people are currently enjoying a healthier life.
However, although having been convinced by the importance of cleaning the environment, I have to say it is not a wise suggestion to claim it is the most important thing the government and the society should concern when the improvement of health is taken into consideration. Simply, we have to face the truth that not all health problems could be directly associated with environmental impacts. Is insomnia caused by the inappropriate disposal of the household waste into the forests or the rivers? Does karoshi result from the heavy smog covering the city region and sheltering all the sunshine that should have been enjoyed by the busy office workers? Is the reason why more young children suffer from eye-sight loss and have to rely on thick glass the global warming together with other related problems?
Therefore, we should focus on other ways as well to become healthier. Keeping a well-balanced diet, doing some routine exercises, and visiting the medical care services regularly are all directly helpful to our individual health. Last year, Facebook initiated an online survey among the netizens, aiming at finding out the best way for personal health improvement. The result showed that nearly 90% of the respondents chose to do various exercises to keep fit, while environment improvement was not listed in the top 3. As to the reason, respondents explained that even though environment improvement would also be beneficial, other ways would be more efficient and more direct.
Above all, cleaning the environment is surely important to improve people's health level, but it is not the most significant and direct way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2550.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20408163265 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84146133893 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575510204082 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4126678362 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277613387952 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628756718318 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893094618263 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156815728561 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079235042715 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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