Do you agree or disagree to the following statement? The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment.
At this society where people consider health care as one of the most vital issue, the methods governments use to improve the public health standard are bound to be examined by all men. A simple recognition of this argument lends our discussions to the questions of what is the most important thing the government should do to ameliorate the health care. Although some people adhere to this belief that cleaning the environment is most important, in my vantage point. Thus, I disagree that
The first aspect to point out is that there are many other manners more essential and fundamental than cleaning the environment. Evoking public’s awareness of health care is definitely an obvious example. As a matter of fact, no matter how often the government cleans the streets, as long as people still frequently, freely litter, the street would forever be a mess. Without the shadow of doubt, cleaning the environment is like taking out the shallow cover of a problematic pond—the core trouble still remains in the deep.
The second subtle point is that favorable environment does not necessarily contribute to fine health care. It is absolutely undeniable that health care is associated with many other factors such as personal habits, food security and medical resources. In fact, many professionals have suggested that the rich and the rags living in the same environment still vary on their health care quality, due to their dissemblance on wealth. Namely, the environment is only one factor that fairly affect the health care. It is not the only—and neither the most important—factor the government should concerned.
On the whole according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is quite crystal-clean that the most important thing the government should do to improve the health care is clean the environment. It is high time that we look at other crucial factors that are equally or even more worth improving.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, look, second, so, still, thus, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18095238095 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91677453639 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549206349206 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4534083264 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.571428571 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374203243305 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126974049762 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128058874415 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238033478131 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105790338073 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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