The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment.
Health problem attracts a growing number of attention in the world. Diseases, even cancers involve around us constantly. Health problem is the enormous challenge for us which urgently needs solved. The government makes efforts to offer service and treatment for citizens recently. Some people think the most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment. However, from my perspective, I disagree with the statement.
Admittedly, cleaning the environment by government is important to improve health care sometimes. To be more concrete, air pollution, water pollution is getting worse in the world due to the vehicle exhaust emissions, the polluted-air and polluted water discharged by factories, combustion of the trash and so on. As the management administration, cleaning environment by force can be greatly effective to some extent such as shut down the factories that discharge the polluted air and banning the cars in the streets according to the plate number in alternate days.Through improving air quality and water which we contact with everyday, health care can also be improved.
However, perfecting the medical facilities is more of importance than improving the health care for government sometimes. To be more specific, equipment of the hospital decide treatment’s quality. More high-quality and advancing equipment can save and heal more patients and more difficult and severe diseases. For example, my grandpa was diagnosed as the lung disease by the X-rays 3 years ago which might develop into a cancer if we delay the treatment. And my grandpa is still alive normally now thanks to the remarkable medical equipment. If we did not have the equipment with high technological skill, the result can be very awesome to us. This kind of benefit which can diagnose and cut off the deterioration of the diseases is cleaning the environment does not have. So, perfecting the medical equipment can be more of significance than improving the health care.
Furthermore, evoking the health awareness of citizens is more crucial than cleaning the environment sometimes for government. This is because, cleaning the environment is the extrinsic method, but arousing the health awareness of citizens is the intrinsic approach which is fundamental. If people have a grasp of the value of health from the bottom of heart, they will avoid doing things which is bad for health actively. And they will do anything to stay or prompt their health in their subconscious such as jogging and sticking to a low-fat diet. By contrast, if people do not have the awareness, they will continue to eat many high-calorie food like ice-creams or hamburgers and stay up late to harm their health, even if clean the environment.
In conclusion, although cleaning the environment is important, perfecting the medical infrastructure and arousing the health awareness of the citizens is more of significance sometimes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs solved" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'solving' or 'to be solved'.
Suggestion: solving; to be solved
...s challenge for us which urgently needs solved. The government makes efforts to offer ...
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Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Through
...g to the plate number in alternate days.Through improving air quality and water which w...
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Line 3, column 629, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...quality and water which we contact with everyday, health care can also be improved. H...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 8.0752688172 384% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33618843683 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02014202234 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492505353319 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 757.8 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5844942677 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.347826087 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3043478261 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38394682594 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121148547922 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16895911264 0.0737576698707 229% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210137614954 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801734876344 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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