Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smartphone, video games for fun and entertainment; playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children's development.
Electronic devices which are increasingly attractive to children nowadays, even replace the form of playing outside. Some people think playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development than playing technological devices. And I strongly agree with the statement.
Firstly, letting children play outside help children socialize with others, which can cultivate social skills of them. To be more concrete, social ability is increasingly required today, even for children. Merely the learning skill and the grades are not enough. The skill of interpersonal discussions and personal interactions are playing an important role in the career of children in the future. Children can make friends through playing outside, communicate with the peers who is like-minded with them; They can embrace new experience with others, expand views; They can find out some fortes from others and make up their own deficiencies, which is definitely beneficial to children’s development. These advantages cannot be gained if they always play the computer games. So, making children play outside is better than letting them play technological devices.
Moreover, making children play simpler toy or play outside will help exercise mentality and intelligence, especially when they are playing toys. To be more specific, letting children play toys will make them use their own brains. Such as when they are playing jigsaw puzzles, they need to think how to make the right parts combined, they have to seek every single part carefully. And imaginative abilities will also be developed in this process since they contact with various novel things which can stimulate their imagination. In contrast, if make them always play smartphones, they will not use their brains because they usually accept things passively.
Finally, making children play outside is more beneficial to children’s health and growth than letting them play technological devices. When they play outside, muscles can be exercised, physical function can be enhanced and metabolism can be prompted which are great to their health and growth. But when they are playing electronic devices on the sofa or bed, bodies are dormant. Especially their casual postures, will cause great harm to their bodies, influence their growth such as becoming hunchback. And staring at screens long time will damage their eyesight, which is bad for their lives.
In conclusion, playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development than playing technological devices among social skills, bodies and mentality.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59287531807 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75523057267 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498727735369 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8038770651 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.666666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378016157301 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146564915442 0.076458572812 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127814416034 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.297612430677 0.150856017488 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111256139038 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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