Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are more factors contributing to the success in a future job. Some people believe the ability to get along well with people is more significant than studying hard in school. From my perspective, I contend that they are both essential to the success in the future job.
For one thing, Getting on well with other people means more convenient accesses to success in the future job. Especially for some jobs that involving diversified factors such as human resource, management and so on. It is because the more people whose great relationship with you, the more accesses of information you own. Not all people are engaged in the same area, therefore, if you can relate well to people, you will have more opportunities to obtain information of other areas and these information will help you with your career. Once I needed to do a market survey of a new product in my company. However, I did not have enough time to finish this survey, therefore, I asked my friends for help. I had to say my friends who engaging in different areas indeed gave me a hand since they finished a detailed report about the new product in their fields on time. As a consequence, I submitted a complete market survey on time.
For another, studying hard in school lays a solid base for your future job. Especially for some jobs that need more professional people such as scientific researchers, accountants and so on. It is because you should master the knowledge of the area you are engaged in well in order to enables your work to be more precise. As we all know, scientific researches require everything should be precise, or will cause some huge accidents that endanger people's life. Therefore, having an excellent grasp of professional knowledge will better your work.
As I mentioned above, the statement that the ability to relate well to people is more significant than studying hard in schools cannot hold water. We should use the two skills both well and aiming at different job, you should know how to play their role in your job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...o obtain information of other areas and these information will help you with your career. Once I ...
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Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rmation will help you with your career. Once I needed to do a market survey of a new...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, well, such as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77556818182 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64705506244 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505681818182 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5790620134 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3888888889 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38888888889 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389818623284 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129390286542 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103255679892 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271193007229 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059975273934 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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