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Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smartphone, video games for fun and entertainment; playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development.

In today’s progressive and complex world where we live, there are plenty of determining matters that can be the building blocks in children’s development, and it is questionable which of the fundamental elements can be most influential on children. Some people feel that children today spend too much time on technology like computers or videogames, while it is better for them to play outside with their friends or with toys; however, others think that relying much on technology can even be helpful for children’s development as long as it is not addictive. Personally speaking, I concur with the latter group for some reasons, two compelling ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.

Thanks to the genesis of technology, our world is dependent on it for every function that is taken. As almost most jobs and tasks today are based on technology such as computers and smartphones, it is a necessity for human beings to learn how to work with them. Relying on technology can make children an opportunity to get acquainted with primitive elements of these technologies at the early stage of their life since the mental environment of children is pristine and receptive to learn new things. In this vein, it can be a spark for them to become intelligent due to the mental development that technology can endow them. It is no secret to anyone that today’s employment institutes and companies are willing to recruit individuals who are specialized in working with technology like computers and the internet, children who spend their time with these technologies are more likely to be employed in such vocation in their future life. As a result, parents who are concerned about their children’ job future should allow their children to work with some technologies, like computers and the internet.

Furthermore, children who are occupied with technology, like computers and smartphone, are more likely to become more sociable than children who play outside with their friends. Technology has made way of communication easier, which can result in the strengthening of democracy. It is crystal clear there are several social networks on the internet available by computers and smartphone, and the discussion and the activities in different areas, such as cultural, political and social, can be helpful towards the flourishing of any community. In this vein, acquainting children who are spent their time on computers and smartphone with such useful social networks can provide an opportunity for them to learn how to participate in cultural, political and social activities, which can make our society more prosperous in the near future. Consequently, to make democracy strengthen, it is better to introduce technology to children at an early age.

To put it in a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons, I do hold that that children’s involvement in technology like computers and smartphones is not only harmless but can also be useful if used properly. It is because familiarity with technology at an early age can not only help children to find a decent job in their future life but can also be resulted in a more flourished society.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, then, while, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2662.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17898832685 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03358741033 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455252918288 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.9 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.3023490415 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.375 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.125 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358990225097 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134324092907 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995582245226 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249554276069 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844466113208 0.0645574589148 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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