The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment.
With the developing of the modern society, more and more folks are drawing attention to health care, which is government should be responsible for it. How to improve health care by the government, some argue that it is vital for government to clean the environment to improve health care. In the contrast, others argue that government should focus on other aspects to improve health care. From my perspective, I stand with the latter opinion for following reasons.
First of all, government should enlarge the health care range for people. As we can see from the news, lots of medicine have amazing price. Sometimes this specific kind of medicine is the only support for people with certain illness. Let’s take an example, Gleevec is an extremely effective pills for a certain cancer called leukemia. The survey of medical research shows that the rate of death caused by leukemia does not drop evidently. People may be confused about why we have already invented a wonderful medicine for the illness, however many people still die due to this leukemia. The true reason is the price of Gleevec, it is too expensive to use even for a rich family. They will quick sell their cars and house for buying this life saving medicine for a family member. Chinese government found this issue and put Gleevec into health care range. After that we can see the promising rising number of people are still alive under leukemia.
In additional, government should also put more hospitals with good quality into health care. This movement will benefit these poor people that they are able to afford expense of excellent hospital. From my observation, China and United States have the same problem is that there are only few famous and excellent hospitals in health care, which means people with illness have to share a relative intense medical resources. It is obvious that this situation cause slow efficiency for both doctors and patients. So there are several advantages for government putting more hospital into health care. People will spend less in waiting, they enable solve their own issue quickly. Plus doctors and nurse have less work pressure and provide a better diagnosis for the patients. What’s more, this movement will also push hospitals to be excellent into a certain area, which will improve the quality and fame of this hospital.
Admittedly, cleaning environment is a method to improve health care. We have to say it will generate some efforts for a better health care. In the meantime, we have ask a question about cost-effect problem. Making a clean environment will cost a fortune without any doubt. However some illness do not cause by the pollutant or dirty environment. There is no direct evidence that shows insomnia has relation with dirty environment. If government will spend the money in psychology consulting into health care which will definitely solve the problem I mentions above.
To warp up, I believe that government has lot to do in order to improve health care, but cleaning the environment is definitely not the most important thing to accomplish. There are more vital and effective aspects to complete like I mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, in addition, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04761904762 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53692977798 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487619047619 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.0 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1610169481 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4838709677 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.935483871 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61290322581 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334600597474 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935592152221 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127362386052 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234233208781 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122924449351 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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