Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment.
By and large, government investment in different sectors plays a big role in every aspect of people’">people’s life. The inevitable question which has heated debate among politicians is what investment has efficient effect on the people’">people’s health care. some scientist advocates the idea that having an updated equipment could help to public health system. But, I firmly believe investing on having a healthy environment is more reasonable. In the following statement, I will elaborate on my view point through two noticeable reasons.
At first, industrialization has significant effects on environment. In the modern world, increasing industrial is an inventible event that pollutes the environment such as air and water pollution. If the state wants to respect for health’s people, should make some serious decision to control these factors. For instance, an investigation which take in Isfahan, that adjacent to a big industrial area, proved the increasing illness in this city. air pollution damage every people who live there and give major of their time and money for treating kinds of respiratory problems.
Furthermore, trash accumulation in the environment could be the origin of many illnesses. Almost municipals aggregate trash near the city instead of recycling which decrease the beauty of city and being source of many illnesses. For a good example, I should mention the tehran that solve this problem with investing on recycling and creates much revenue and jobs for people of this urban. two years after this decision, periphery of the tehran had been very beautiful, and with the amazing way, established many artificial forest in near the city from profits of recycling industry. so from this case, we can learn the trash is a dirty wealth which we should use it.
In conclusion, I feel strongly that cleaning the environment has so much healthy benefits which can convince governments to invest in it. this is because it’s can compensate the hazardous effects of industrialization, and because can sole garbage issue of the cities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50920245399 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.69386294187 2.67179642975 138% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604294478528 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0129731488 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.647058824 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0835752170098 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0263609702062 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0254766631302 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0460035248567 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0123338960357 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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