TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Contemporary human lives in a sophisticated world where changing is acquiring at a galloping rate. thus, the government have to allocate his budget to provide facilities for people. The controversial question which arises here is whether government have to dedicate his funding to amend internet access or boost public transportation. If I were to choose, I would definitely improve public transportation. it is my firm belief that public transportation is more significant than internet access for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
to begin with, one should take into account the fact that urbanizing is being developed at a rapid pace, so all the people use their own cars and pollute the air. when government devote most of his budget to establish public transportation rather than improve internet access people perceive that they have to utilize them. As a result, the government diminish the horrible air pollution. my own experience is a compelling answer. Several years ago we lived in a city that the air quality was awkward, and most of the people had difficulty breathing and they had to spend most of their days in local hospital to be in treatment. thus, the government decided to generate more public transportation, and informed people to use them in order to decrease the pollution. Had the government improved internet access and never care about public transportation, the people would have suffered from wide ranges of respiratory illnesses.
The second remarkable reason is that by allocating this funding on public transportation, people can transport easily anywhere they want. Moreover, it is more affordable for people because of the low cost. In contrast, when government denote their currencies to increase internet access and overlook public transportation, people have to spend more money to carry different places. my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. Following my graduation from university, I drew up plans to commence a small software develop business. The place that I chose for my purpose was far from my home, and because there was not public transportation near to my home I had to go there with taxi, and the price was astronomical. After the government established public transportation near my home I steadily use it. Not only did I save more money each month, but also it was easier for me to reach my workplace.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government have to expend his money on public transportation instead of improving internet access because public transportation reduces the amount of pollutant and because it is more affordable for people to transport with them rather than use their car or take a taxi.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, second, so, thus, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17594654788 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08408974666 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501113585746 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8320240284 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.380952381 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280324219881 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907067917387 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646876261739 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194843036002 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215291585152 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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