The extended family( grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than in the past.
There have been several disputed discussion on whether the extended family is less critical in the present life or not, especially if we compare with past. As for everything, there are always two sides to every question. Personally, I believe that the extended family did not care so much about the other family as they did in the past. I feel this for two reasons, which I explore in the following ways
First of all, Extended family are now more greedy than in the past; moreover, In the past family members were more keen to help other family members. My personal experience is a compelling example of this; about two months back, My parent had died in the motor crash. My father owes 10 million from my uncle for business. On the day of my father's death, my uncle came asked me to give 10 million; I was shocked. Therefore, This seen made my mind that extended family is not keen to understand the problems of other family members.
Secondly, Extended family did not provide assistance to other blood members, especially in the case of financial crises. For better understanding, let us look at the metaphor of My brother. About ten months back, he went to financial crises, and the reason for such financial crises is loss in his business which results in negative networth. His balance sheet showed that he owe about 50 million to trade creditors; my parents did not have the savings or investment to set-off such huge borrowing. My very rich uncle had refused us to assist.
In conclusion, although In some scenarios, extended family is equally essential in the present, If we compared with past. Nevertheless, these scenarios are infrequent now. Thus, i think that in the past your uncle, aunts plays a role like your mother, however, now they did not care about other blood members
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78846153846 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5314588726 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6361833103 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.375 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8125 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234885324001 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775129866694 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735279294275 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147325470014 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582121361927 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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