Do you agree or disagree with the statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Family, as the fundamental unit of socialization exerts a great importance to the construction of a scociety; however, in recent decades there witnesses transformative changes taking place in every aspect of living, the structure of a typical family endure significant changes. Families accommodating various different generations are gradually replaced by smaller families containing less members. This shift from a complicated to a simple family structure can be explained by changes in lifestyle of modern people, especially the increasing independence of young adults from their parents, and it creates a more favorale living conditions for family members in a more comfortale and convenient manner.
A simple family supporting less number of members allows each individual to live freely and happily. Firstly, a common dispute of numerous extended families is about household management owing to the disparity in lifestyles, habits, and preferences of different members of different generations. For example, while young people these days construe staying up late as a common habit, it poses a tremendous problems to elderly who struggle to insomnia, consequently they may be disturbed by other's activities in the night. Secondly, there is a serious problem to find a general living timetable suitable to every person in a large family for each person has distinctive working skedule. For instance, in Asian family that the mother takes the responsibility for all household chores of a family including preparing supper for all members, choosing an optimum dinner menu accordingly to each person wish or a appropriate time for dinner that every one has arrived at home is a dilemma. As the result, the less complicated family is prefered by increasing number of modern family.
Nowadays, young people strive for the life of independece and living apart from their parents is a prevailing trend among them, thus the extended families are no longer preferable among recent generations. Some argue that people should not choose a life of independence from the beginning of their adulthood since they have not properly prepared for separated living, taking both financial and living matter. It is reasonable that a great number of young adults who leave their family in early age cannot attain financial well-being, many sink into debts for they live at subsistence level, and many others commit delinquency due to financial hardship. However, although leaving original family creates tough challenges for young people, it equipped them with necessary skills and determination for future success. Indeed, difficulties and challenges posing in the first steps of independent life provides them with valuable lessons, making them more versatile in dealing with real circumstances and finding resolutions for interpersonal relationships which are the cardinal principle for a sucessful person.
In conclusion, simple families encompassing few generations or the absence of young and elderly people in a typical modern family is a rising phenomenon in recent years for the fact that it solves various problems derising from the living of different generations and the desire to get an independent life of young people, indeed, smaller families offer a more comfortable and convenient living for all family members that they can live a life according to their own wishes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun members is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...replaced by smaller families containing less members. This shift from a complicated ...
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Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
...s a common habit, it poses a tremendous problems to elderly who struggle to insomnia, co...
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Line 3, column 905, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...menu accordingly to each person wish or a appropriate time for dinner that every ...
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Line 5, column 535, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sink seems to be countable; consider using: 'many sinks'.
Suggestion: many sinks
...age cannot attain financial well-being, many sink into debts for they live at subsistence...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2857.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49423076923 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98830004019 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509615384615 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 918.0 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.8477141996 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.466666667 100.406767564 190% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6666666667 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2666666667 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0939082013172 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433230302172 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273105729742 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0655914236739 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132059209194 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.8 11.7677419355 185% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 20.05 58.1214874552 34% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 10.1575268817 186% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 86.8835125448 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.002688172 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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