Pets should be treated like family members. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons to support your opinion.
Loneliness is an increasingly social issue of the modern world that afflicts the mental well-beings of both elderly and young people. In this context, domesticated animals such as dogs or cats become an integral part of every family for they are loyal partners for every adult owner and amicable friends for children. They play an important role in every family, a pet should be treated equally as a human family member for the respect for their own right and for the valuable lesson about humanity for the kids.
The equality in the treatment of animals and humans exemplifies the virtue of humanity that is a treasured lesson for young generations. Since every member of the family shows amicable affection towards the pets, it is a guidance for children to develop kind behaviors and good personalities. Indeed, altruistic feeling is pivotal in shaping the morality of young people and it can be only achieved by virtued deeds towards every God’s creations including animals. For instance, by construing a dog as a member of the family, a child develops his sense of goodness by the manner he treats his pet equally to every human-being. Furthermore, in the reminiscence about childhood of every person, pets are a central image in our memory. In fact, the size of a typical modern family is decreasing over time due to the prevailing trend of independent living among the youth and the elderly, a pet becomes the closest friend for many kids that they are the only confidant for the lonely to share their experience and emotions. With the elderly suffering the loss of their romantic partners and living a life of solitude, they find the solace in nurturing their pets. All in all, pets are actual members of a majority of moderns families, who help the children to build their kindness and being a fellow for old people in their reclusive lives.
In addition to the merits brought about by raising a pet as a human-like member in a family, we treat them equally in respect of their own right. Some argue that pets are just animals and people should not treat them as a human-being regardless of their affectionate feelings towards their pets. In their argument, they show that if people oppose to any disparate treatments between humans and pets, every animal in the world deserves this privilege. In fact, domesticated animals constitute a large proportion of the world’s animals, while the number of wild animals is decreasing over decades. Nevertheless, pets evolve over time for their adaptation for their livings with humans, those animals develop some specific characteristics that are suitable for human’s condition of living, rather than the wild. Indeed, those unique attributes distinguish them from other animals that have not undergone any domestication process. For example, various genetic researches point out that dogs develop various traits from their separate living from their ancestors like wolves. A pet knows how to express their emotions, they care about its owner’s attitude, and he builds a strong bone to humans, all these facts can not be disregarded.
In conclusion, no matter how they are different from us, pets are the members in many families, they are teachers for our children about compassion and goodness, they are partners for alienated people who seek a fellow, and they are friends that deserve the equal treatment of all humans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 389, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...n every family, a pet should be treated equally as a human family member for the respect f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2838.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 561.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05882352941 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72569012602 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488413547237 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 892.8 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6974035681 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.9 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.05 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103394035232 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397985109741 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301996322722 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690312416333 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306247222672 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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