The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Opinions vary with the regard to the question of whether the extended family appears to be less important that previously thought. Although each person is on his own nowadays, extended family is useful in todays life and request special attention. The wider family, the more interaction between and among relatives makes it possible to share the life experience and valuable advices.
To begin with, the shortage of time nowadays has become an enormous problem among young people, who have to spend more time in the offices. Relatives who do not work make are able to spend time with children of those, who work all day long. To be specific, a person begin his day much earlier today, than it was before, waking up at 6 o’clock in the morning and frequently working till midnight. The lack of spare time creates troubles raising children, who, in turn, need a lot of attention at early years from grown-ups. By asking grandparents to stay with beloved children, grown-ups are able to work and boost their careers. However, a person has to choose whether to expand her career or spend less time working and more with relatives.
By the same token, by managing the family budget relatives may make more significant cash outflows to buy a house or a car. For example, in a family each grown-up may contribute into joint savings account each month. This practice creates the feeling of stability and family wealth. In addition, living in a house is a huge cost, which can be covered by each person living in a house, except children of course. Moreover, the cost of buying a house could require large cash outflow, which is usually unavailable to young families, so relatives has to increase their debt burden by signings facilities with lenders. Nonetheless, the burden may be too high for a young couple, and by raising debt on a whole family instead of just two married, young parents are able to afford a more comfortable housing.
All in all, the life within the relatives fosters the relationships with beloved ones and inculcates people with the responsibility to take care of the older part of the family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 34, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
Opinions vary with the regard to the question of whether the extended family appears to be less ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, as to, for example, in addition, of course, to begin with, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 43.0788530466 23% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84806629834 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5727191323 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558011049724 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6378022361 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.6875 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101092195385 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365731186428 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468491474632 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0602477064234 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532638551319 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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