Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not famous people such as professional actors or players must have more privacy than they have now has received a great deal of attention from journalists and sociologists. Although some may say that famous persons belong to the societies, and they do not need privacy. I, as well as, many others believe that famous entertainers like other people need privacy for their life because a lack of privacy may have a bad influence on them.
First of all, an important reason why famous people deserve to have more privacy is that they need peace in their life, and privacy is fundamental rights of people. Famous people, just like other people, need privacy in their life. As a result of having privacy, they live in a peaceful environment. I mean that ones want to do some activities such as doing exercise or going trip. If they have privacy, they can enjoy their activities without any disturbance from newspapers and reporters. Thus, journalists must hold their limits and do not disregard famous people rights just for getting a promotion in their career.
Another reason for this point of view is that lacking privacy makes their problem bigger than they are. In life, all people have problems with their works, families and finances. Most people prefer to solve problems in their privacy situations. But, when in all place and situations the reporters and newspaper are present, without any doubts, celebrities suffer from lacking privacy. In this situation, by reporting their problems with journalists, they show their problems bigger than they are, and it may cause reasons that famous entertainers and athletes cannot solve their problems. In other words, their problems become more severe than they are.
Finally, it is occasionally said that by not having privacy, famous people would face financial problem. All people may do activities in rung ways, or doing some illegal activities. When reporters rapport these fault activities, it has negative effects on people minds about ones. Thus, some famous brand that has a financial contract with them would cancel their financial contract for preventing negative effect on their own brands. Furthermore, when famous actors do something in a rung way, directors would not have preferred to use these actors in their films or serials; thus, ones face a very bad financial situation in their life.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that each person such as ordinary people or famous people needs privacy in their life. The privacy makes for them mental peace, stability of financial position, and safe margin in their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not famous people such as professional acto...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, i mean, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14318181818 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53948061163 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477272727273 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4270133276 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.863636364 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327171368616 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110168087846 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980561822814 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20445442589 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118333559391 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.