A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go on vacation to buy a car Your friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Sometime all of us face with the difficulty of choice. In that specific moment we all need people, who can give us an essential advice. Personally, I believe that going on vacation is way better decision, that buying a car. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, we all need to relax sometimes and vacation may be that amazing opportunity. It is not hard to say how beneficial the vacation could be for us. First of all, if we go on vacation to other country we can learn culture of that nation, we discover new places, take pictures, go to restaurants, maybe even meet new people and make connections. Secondly, it is good for our nerve system, especially if we go to the quiet place close to mountains or lakes. Closeness to nature can heal our mental wounds. We can make a fire and cook meet on it like ancient people did.
Additionally, if we are thinking between vacation and buying a car than we should certainly opt vacation, because usually the cost of vacation can be not more that a thousand dollars. Lets ask ourself what car can we buy for that price? It will be a very old and used car, which can deliver many problems to us. In fact, we can stay with nothing if something goes wrong. My friends experience is a compelling example of this. When he was eighteen years old he decided to buy his first car. He doesn’t have an amount of money for a new car, so he went for a used old Ford Mustang. The seller convinced him that the car was in a wonderful technical shape, and it really looked astonishing, moreover he even gave a little discount for him. He was so happy, but only after a few days the car’s engine died. And he left with nothing. So we have to think twice when we buy a used cars.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is better to go on vacation than to buy a car. I think so, because we can receive great emotions on vacation and we absolutely don’t need to buy a used car.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'essential advice'.
Suggestion: essential advice
...ent we all need people, who can give us an essential advice. Personally, I believe that going on va...
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Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'relax'.
Suggestion: sometimes relax
...essay. To begin with, we all need to relax sometimes and vacation may be that amazing opport...
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Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...an be not more that a thousand dollars. Lets ask ourself what car can we buy for tha...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rience is a compelling example of this. When he was eighteen years old he decided to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33155080214 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53344468264 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532085561497 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7327440766 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4347826087 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2608695652 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86956521739 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171829181174 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547907304381 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386049793179 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116415982629 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408963974827 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.54 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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