Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
our civilization is in a wonderfull phaze of its development, we call it "diigital era". The specific sign of it is information,which is now everywhere and nowhere at the same time. How could it be, one may ask. The answer is it is because of the internet. The speaker argues that mass media and the internet have caused people's attention spans to get shorter, but on the other hand we are able to sort through large quantities of information and to find what's important for us. I would agree with this claim and will try to cover it in my essay.
To begin with, lets talk about mass media and the internet, to understand what it is and why it is called digital technologies. mass media started a little bit earlier than the internet in the beginning of the 20's century with the mass production of tv sets. Future historics would say that it were a golden days for commercial, news and movies. At that time before the beginning of the internet we didn't have a chance to choose what information to choose. you believed everything that was coming from the tv screens. Nowadays everything have changed, because we have a wonderfull technlogy , which is called "internet". what is internet who controls it, one might ask. The simpliest answer on this quastion, internet is everywhere, nobody controls it, that is why we now can opt what information to read, watch or to believe. The internet is global, with the help of it we can see what is going on on the entire planet. If we compare two technologies like tv and the internet it is more like mononews and multinews.
why it has become harder for us humans to focus our attention on one thing, than it was before. The answer is simple enough, our brain tries to protect itself of a huge ammount of information that is coming to it. it's like a self-defence mechanism of our brain. Remember yourself, trying to find something uselful on the internet. sometimes it could be easy, but sometimes you could spent hours searching for something without a result. why is that? this is because the internet is full of junk and sometime useless gigabytes of data. Hence, our brain has developed a so called smart filter to opt what information to keep or not. that thing is helping it to jump through hundreds of web sites per day and to stay in a good fit.
To summarize, i would like to say that indeed our focus and concentration has become worse, we still able to cycle through large ammount of data and to find important information for us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, so, still, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63452914798 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81013549544 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493273542601 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0241881081 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1538461538 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.46153846154 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21263012395 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536155540565 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714830075603 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135675464523 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566141723736 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.