In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay (version two).
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, individuals have been willing to live as long as it is possible. Nowadays, human beings live longer than before, and there are assorted kinds of reasons, which are related to this events. Among its countless reasons, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that technology as well as science have been improved very much. Because of this improvement, almost all diseases can be detected at their first levels, and be treated immediately. To shed more light on this matter, the noteworthy statistics revealed by a recently conducted research in the Massachusetts Institute of Technology (MIT) shown that above 90 percent of sicknesses and their causes are well known.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that in the present time, there are a host of facilities, such as healthcare centers, which have eased our lives, in nearly all cities. For instance, people can check their health regularly by going to a healthcare center. On the contrary, in the past, individuals did not have easy access to these centers since the number of such centers were very low, and they did not exist in all areas. Therefore, a large number of people would have to commute long distances to reach a healthcare facility. their diseases did not identify in many cases.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are several proofs that why people are living more than before. Genuinely, not only is the diagnosis of the illnesses easier than the past but also human beings’ lives are facilitated. Consequently, these reasons briefly vindicate this assertion that why the length of people’s lives has been improved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as well as, in many cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09385113269 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75514982092 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592233009709 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1736371379 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140959559734 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480509995447 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368318724829 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854810435731 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300305910444 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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