TPO 52
Do you agree or disagree?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Throughout history, in all society, there have been some rules, which all of their residents had to follow them. This issue whether or not that in the present time, the societies’ rule have become more severe, has engendered copious controversies among people. Although a certain conclusion cannot be made, I, to a great extent, hold this viewpoint that young adults are not restricted by rules. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that nowadays, adolescents have more freedom rather than the past. In other words, they can choose their religion, their jobs, and many other similar subjects by themselves and without invention of others. To make a tangible example, in the past, each nation had a tyrant master or king, and all individuals had to obey his laws, which were highly tough. Furthermore, if a person did not pursue those rules, he or she had to endure some hard punishments. Therefore, human being who lived in the past, were tightly limited by a great deal of unfair regulations. As it is clear, people, especially young adults, have the chance to behave more independently nowadays.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that all parents are aware of this matter that the technology is flourishing very fast. Since juniors have a hosts of communication ways with other individuals all over the world, they cannot be limited by rules, and their parents just can give them some advice in order to guide them. For instance, a research that has been conducted by some scientists in my country has shown that almost 90 percent of young adults are following at least two celebrities through the social networks such as Instagram, Facebook and so forth. Sine such people have an influential and tremendous impact on adolescents, if children pursue someone with unsuitable behavior(u), they may lose their precious time. Hence, it is vitally important for young people to be advised by their parents. Therefore, the more progression in technology, the more freedom in the young adults’ lives.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that laws, which the young have to obey them, are not strict. This contention is due to this importance that not only do they decide for their lives freely, but also because of the accessibility of communication instruments it is not possible to limit them. Therefore, they are not confined by tough rules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...esidents had to follow them. This issue whether or not that in the present time, the societies...
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Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a host' or simply 'hosts'?
Suggestion: a host; hosts
...ourishing very fast. Since juniors have a hosts of communication ways with other indivi...
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Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...e in order to guide them. For instance, a research that has been conducted by some scienti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, at least, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99546485261 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74120868231 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562358276644 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5259811366 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.947368421 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0826184009363 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272200962709 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314842734814 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0538495564871 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171607855417 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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