Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting from friends of your own age.
Life is full of choices and that is why people always need different advice from others. In my opinion, people usually can get valuable advice from their peers. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, the ways people of the same age think are similar. Those people can understand each other better, let alone friends. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was asking some suggestions about my future career, my father always asked me to go to the big companies without considering my ambitions and my interests since he believed that working in big companies can earn more money and have a more stable life. Although the company I wanted to go to is small, it could give me more opportunities to learn and develop. On the other hand, my best friend was willing to hear my ideas and supported me to chase my goals. Additionally, she analyzed the advantages and disadvantages of my options. Thus, people at my age, especially my friends, can actually provide the best way for me because they stand the perspective of me to think.
Moreover, people of the same age have closed points of view, and their lifestyles are similar as well. With the same educated system and technologies, people born in the same generation can give more practical suggestions. For instance, the professor of art history required his students to give him a presentation of how influential artists impact modern art, and one of my classmates presented comprehensively, he listed almost every famous artist after the renaissance. In that, the professor hoped he share it with other students, and then the professor suggested him to print it out. Another student, however, recommended him to post on the e-learning system of the university to make sure all of the students can see it, even the students who did not take the course but need a good presentation sample. Besides this, the student would not waste any paper. Therefore, people can get effective, practical advice from those who have the same background.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that getting advice from peers can help people to make the most suitable decision for their situation. This is because friends can understand, listen to me more, and my peers usually have creative and novel ideas instead of old methods.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 506, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'shares'.
Suggestion: shares
...ssance. In that, the professor hoped he share it with other students, and then the pr...
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Line 5, column 696, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...g system of the university to make sure all of the students can see it, even the students ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92713567839 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76752264423 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56783919598 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7357429509 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.05 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139914592768 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493505919959 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662796215234 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113021062739 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543127059869 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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