In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
With the development of technology, people can travel around the world easily. More and more place relay on tourists for living. In my opinion, if a country want to attract more tourists, the government should spend more budget on the appearance of the buildings and the streets. There are two reasons why I feel this way, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, most people like to take pictures when they are traveling so it is important for them to visit good-looking places. Besides this, lots of people today are passionate about social media and used to share their lives on different social platform. Consider celebrities, for instance. They usually post beautiful photo of themselves on Instagram to tell everyone they have been some places abroad. This is not only for showing off but attract more people to follow them and earn money by their popularities. Therefore, repairing old buildings and street is actually useful to appeal more people to visit a city.
Moreover, it is for sure that rebuild old construction and clean the streets can increase the number of tourists since it is safer and tidy. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I traveled in Europe, I was used to compare different city I have been. I was surprised at the homeless people and dirty streets in Budapest after being in Vienna. The roads in Vienna was not messy at all, I felt comfortable while I was strolling in the city. In addition, if someone asks my recommendation about which city or viewpoint should go, I will choose Vienna. Thus, there is no doubt that maintaining the appearance of a city can appeal more visitors.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that keeping a place clean and make it looks new can definitely attract more travelers effectively. This is because people take pictures and like to show of how they enjoy the lives. Additionally, most people prefer to have a trip in a clean, tidy place instead of a messy place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to comparing'.
Suggestion: used to comparing
... this. When I traveled in Europe, I was used to compare different city I have been. I was surpr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86176470588 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71924291061 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555882352941 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6740206241 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.65 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195201763656 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625558253763 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874863776259 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132289303186 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915917587201 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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