Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Generally, government’s decisions on how to invest its budget in various subjects have an absolutely crucial impact on the future of the country, since they determine the level of allocated energy and budget that should invest on different grounds. In this regard some people believe it is best for government to invest in support of art, while others believe that it should invest on athletics. I, personally, subscribe to the former one due to a number of reasons, two of which are of great importance compared to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
First and foremost, investing in the art have a more long-lasting effect compared to athletic achievements. It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that the art is the symbol of the culture and civilization of a nation. Hence, it is vital to cherish and preserve our culture, since our history reminds us our achievements and traditions and is a prominent part of our identity. Thus, it is essential for government to try its best to support art. These acts can have a durable impact in our history. In contrast, supporting the athletic activities, which are just some kinds of ephemeral phenomena, will be forgotten sooner or later. For instance, the art works of Leonardo Da Vinci, which are the most precious masterpieces of all time, have survived over centuries and have contributed enormously to the culture and history of the nation. People nowadays and throughout the whole history have always cherish this art, yet no one remembers anything about athletic activities of that time.
Having discussed the issue from the previous point of view I would rather look at it from another perspective. Nowadays there are very few organizations and groups all around the world that are willing to support artistic activities. These kinds of act receive less attention on the side of authorities, media and people and, except for the minority of people who are engaged in art industry, no one cares about the subsistence of art. In contrary, different strata of the society have an inclination to follow the most up-to-date news and events contributing to athletic activities. A large number of companies, organizations and advertisement groups are willing to be a sponsor for various athletic groups, since investing in such areas help them gain a hoard of money. For instance, during the world cup or Olympic Games a huge number of organizations support athletes who are supposed to participate the Olympic, hence athletes do not have difficulties concerning economic issues.
In summary, taken to account all above-mentioned arguments into consideration it can be concluded that governments should invest in supporting art rather that athletics. Not only does this investment have a longer effect in the history of a nation, but also it will help this industry survive, since no other organization will do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 896, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'cherished'.
Suggestion: cherished
...hroughout the whole history have always cherish this art, yet no one remembers anything...
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Line 5, column 585, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...ts contributing to athletic activities. A large number of companies, organizations and advertisem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, thus, while, except for, for instance, in contrast, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17130620985 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02122129427 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51391862955 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8439768244 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.105263158 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5789473684 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189970900244 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640434866451 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600655386967 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117597729768 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216303172076 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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