Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of humanity, human beings have been involved in a great struggle in decision making process, since it plays a pivotal role in human beings survival. Family members, especially parents have an undeniable impact in developing this skill. In this regard, some people believe that young people, nowadays, are less dependent on their parents compared to past times. Others disagree. I personally subscribe to the former one. In the following paragraphs I will explain my most convincing reasons.
First and foremost, young people are more knowledgeable and educated compared to the past. The high education has brought about more self-cognizance for people. Today, the educated society enjoys economic growth, convenience and social and cultural developments, which have provided high living standards for people who live in this era. Hence, young people today have more self-confidence and take risks and adventures to broaden their horizons. In addition, in the past young people used to rely on their parents, because they did not have independency. Today, thanks to good education, young people can find an appropriate job, get independent and can decide for their own lives very soon.
Secondly, the development of communication tools and media has revolutionized our decision making process. The galloping rate in which science and technology are flourishing has made the dream of a global village come true. Today, people can easily get in touch with each other. The state-of-the-art communication tools have facilitated interactions between people. People can easily communicate with different people with similar problems from very distant places and ask for an advice. Additionally, young people as the members who are dealing with high speed communication tools and media the most have other opportunity to ask for an advice rather than their parents. On the other hand, these facilities were lacking in the past, which makes the current era the best time for living.
To sum up, today, young people have been more independent from their parents in making decisions compared to past time, for not only the high educational atmosphere of the society has brought about more self-cognizance and wisdom, but also advanced communicational tools have provided various opportunities to get in touch with other people with similar experiences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
... since it plays a pivotal role in human beings survival. Family members, especially pa...
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Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...ms from very distant places and ask for an advice. Additionally, young people as the memb...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...parents in making decisions compared to past time, for not only the high educational atmo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, in addition, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45231607629 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92645842517 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547683923706 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6315085497 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.315789474 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330358729703 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975452910597 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075563306593 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218627184756 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377163746751 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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