Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
every nation is comprised by each individual human, and even though one single human is nothing compared to the whole nation, his or her influence can even change the nation. However, every person is capable of doing so, artists or people who create arts are more likely doing so. personally, i believe that governments should fund arts more compared to other activities such as sports team and etc. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in the following essay.
First of all, arts contain a nation's distinctive characteristic, culture, and history. arts can be anything such as painting, musics, folk tale, theatrical play, and structures. Moreover, it is usually arts that hold valuable heritage of a particular nation that transmit from one generation to next generation. my own experience is a compelling example of this. when i was in University, i had a chance to participate in an exchange program abroad. my teacher advised me to bring my traditional musical instrument to go. so i followed his advice. after going abroad, i had to introduce my country before many people. Without talking anything as i was being shy, i just played my traditional instrument, then everyone clapped their hands and deeply emotioned by the music that they expressed their deep curiosity about my country and culture. I'm still fascinated by the power of mere traditional instrument representing and introducing my country to many people.
Secondly, arts have power to give deep impression and make people be more sophisticated. when a music played or movie is shown, most people are usually engulfed by its presence and sometimes forget about their daily lives and their stress or worldly concerns are decreased. that's the power of an art and it can even change person. For instance, my cousin was really bad tempered bully in his school that everyone from his school reported and blamed him. he as really a hard kid to control. one time we watched a movie in theater and the movie was about one man's journey throughout his life. The main hero was a humble and heroic person who struggles throughout many obstacles in his life until the end. The move really showed how being bad is evil and how being good is fruitful thing in life. after the movie, my cousin sat silently and thoughtfully in his sit for a while, then all of a sudden he talked about how bad he was to his classmates and etc. From that time, my cousin has become really helpful and modest student and even graduated his high school with honorary degree.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that arts are utmost necessary to country and government should pay more attention to them and even fund them. this is because arts are holders of a nation's identity and change people into positive ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84388185654 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63795177095 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544303797468 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.223393564 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3076923077 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2307692308 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57692307692 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.5376344086 451% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0674604149833 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0221344362416 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358743574739 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.05626423442 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316493912069 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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