Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Even though there is a popular agreement that investing money in arts is significant. I have a different opinion. I believe that the Government should spend more money to support athletics. I feel this way for two reasons which I will describe in the following paragraphs.
First of all, sports and games play an integral role for a healthy lifestyle. Obviously, when people do the exercises every day they can maintain their body shapes. As a result, it will have a positive influence on their health. If the Government will expend more money to open sports centers and gyms then people will engage in these kinds of activities. Hence, they will have a stress-free life because physical activity also has a psychological effect. Along with this, people will not suffer from chronic diseases like diabetes and hypertension. This is best exemplified by my personal experience. My uncle used to go to the gym daily bases. The gym fees were highly affordable because it was supported by the Government. He had a high blood pressure problem. By doing the exercises daily, he felt a big difference in his blood pressure. He also lost a lot of weight and he felt fit and healthy. If he had not gone to the gym, he would not have been able to maintain a good physical condition.
Secondly, physical exercises also improve social skills. When people are involved in different kinds of Olympics like badminton, hockey, etc they will get a chance to meet new individuals. Consequently, they can share their knowledge with each other and make new friends. Furthermore, participating in different sports will provide a great benefit for society to enhance their communication skills. Therefore, the Government should organize free athletic programs so that everyone can afford to participate in them. For instance, when I was in college I used to be very shy at the beginning of my first semester. I did not have many friends at that time. I really liked badminton. I joined the sports club which was sponsored by the Government. I did not have to pay anything for that club. Eventually, I made new friends that helped me to boost my confidence. Thus I felt a huge change in my personality. If I had not played badminton I would not have been able to improve my social life.
In conclusion, I have a firm belief that the Government should contribute towards athletic activities. This is because it will strengthen the general health of the public and also because it will increase the social movement among the population.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87412587413 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84315976832 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2777345741 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.34375 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.40625 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34375 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123442399686 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032835738978 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836404094187 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104620464137 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859110680032 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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