Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
In any historical time period, the debate on the direction and focus of discretionary government investment around the world has never been completely settled. Although sports are considered more realistic to invest in, more funds should be allocated to encourage the development of arts.
It is clear arts have always been underfunded. First, since not many acknowledge the immense values of arts to people and society, arts are often less preferred when it comes to deciding which is worth putting money into. For example, compared to sports and athletics, arts are rarely funded from training process to national competitions and international tournaments as people presume it will not bring any profits and thus, be a waste, which is not true. In addition, the public's decreased interest in every type of art forms can be blamed on the lack of investment. In fact, arts are usually one of the first to be cut funding in schools, which discourages prospective students from applying to art education as well as creates a vicious circle towards its development.
It would be fair if the governments consider a number of benefits that will accrue from art investments. One of those benefits is that arts produce individuals with critical thinking, empathy and creativity through the process of expressing themselves. Since many thousand years ago, human have started to discover their personality, communicate with others and reflecting society through their works in order to keep growing. Therefore, arts should be more appreciated and encouraged from early education. Moreover, it should be acknowledged that arts assist the preservation and promotion of a country's cultural identity, which consequently brings a myriad of opportunities for both economic and nation brand growth. Korea is an impressive example for successfully accelerating the country's development through allocating a generous annual budget to different forms of art, especially performing arts that are distinctively referred to as K-pop.
In conclusion, some source of funding should be redirected to arts in order to equally support physical and intellectual development of each citizen. This change will also grow a country's identity and affluence as a whole.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43553008596 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03552959912 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604584527221 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9957934928 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.466666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2666666667 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165144598192 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057923264206 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408686969613 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100658322005 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104121254384 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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