I agree with the statement that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than athletics. This is because artists and athletics are in different conditions and need different kinds of financial support.
First of all, athletics are more likely to get financial support from society than artists. There is no denying that sport activities such as Super Bowl attract a great deal of audience every year. Audience will buy tickets to watch the competitions. Advertisements on TV will be a huge income.
In contrast, art museums are attractive to a limited amount of people, it is quite hard for artists to make a living. That is to say, artists need financial support from government more seriously.
Second, even if artists get financial aid from society, it will harm their independence. Let's suppose a poor artist who receives money from a millionaire, he has to compose the art work to the sponsor's taste rather than compose what he wants. It is not only a great harm to the value of his work, but also a negative influence on the development of art. Because of this vicious effect, government should sponsor artists to keep their independence.
Another point is that the market can help athletics grow better. Just take Chinese football team as an example, the athletics in the team are selected by the government, trained by the government and sponsored by the government. But their performance is not satisfying. The football team of other countries are not sponsored by the government, but they slay the Chinese team in the World Cup. This is because the market will give financial aid to the best-performing athletics, which is a health incense to all the athletics.
In a nutshell, artists need government's support more seriously, and government's sponsorship is helpful to the artists but harmful to the athletics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, as to, in contrast, such as, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04560260586 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89995593078 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521172638436 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1834697438 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0555555556 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0555555556 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313732400806 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942208790366 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114990773721 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176334984648 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104090164833 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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