Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.
Students are vital parts of every society. The future of countries depend on their pupils, who spend so much time at school and university, wthere get good education or not. Some people believe that giving score to students’ performance can push them to absorb better, while others disagree and have an opposite opinion. In my view, I think that evaluating students by grades can hurt their eager to learn for two important reasons which I will elaborate in following paragraphs.
First and foremost, students will be disappointed to learn when they get marks. By expanding educational systems in this modern day, teachers have several method to assess the performance of pupils without harming their enthusiastic. Teachers can give them prize when they do not study very well to attract them to learning. For example, when I was at high school, I had a serious professor who punished low grade persons. I was so diligent individual and tried to study during the semester to get high score. However, one day, I got sick badly and I had to take rest for one week. Therefore, I could not study very well since I was asleep all time. After coming back to school, I got the lowest grade in the class and my teacher punished me so hard in spite of my last marks. Hence, I abandoned the school forever due to the fact it was unfair for hard work student. This experience shows me, If teacher give grade to students, they will be disappointed to study.
Second, student will be aggressive instead of encouraging to learn by taking grade. Students are so sensitive to everything. When they are forced to be the best, they react negatively. Giving score to students’ performances can put them under serious pressure which lead them to behave aggressive. For instance, when I started to go elementary school, I was polite and kind. As over time, my parents and teachers pushed me to get higher score, while I spend too much time to prepare for exams. Actually, I felt that I was so bad person who could not convince others perfectly. I cried all time about my condition and mood. Unfortunately, my trait changed significantly and I became bad student who fought with other children instead of studying. As you can see, student will be aggressive when they get marks.
In conclusion, students will not be motivated to learn when they get marks. Getting score not only can make students disappointed, but also can make them aggressive. Teacher should not give students marks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun method seems to be countable; consider using: 'several methods'.
Suggestion: several methods
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Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81882352941 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66126904712 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527058823529 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3342386708 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8518518519 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7407407407 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07407407407 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210151634485 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683157932332 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880819276981 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154730854189 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278240216067 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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