Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social networking sites Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer and why Use specific reasons and examples.
Information is a vital part of one’s life. Issuing imformation can have different results on future of people wthere in positive way or in negative way. Some individuals believes that everyone should upload their own experiences and information to social-networking sites, while others disagree. In my view, I prefer save my privacy and do not make a records for two essential reasons.
First and foremost reason is that own experiences like pictures are private and people should not publish them in social network cite like Telegram and Facebook. By expanding internet and social media, individual can access to anything anytime they want. However, some young persons are evil and can destroy the life of others by their pictures which put on websites. For example, one of my friend got married with a good girl who never be in serious relationship as she told him. They had excellent marriage and life together and they had plan to have three children. However, one day, some of girl’s boyfirend from high school who was so jelous sent their sexy photograph to her husband. He could access that picture because she kept a record on Facebook that time and forgat to delete it. Unfortuntely, her marriage broke down and they got divorce since she was not honest. This experience shows me, if persons want to have long relationship, they should not keep the record for their own private pictuers.
Second, some information is secret and nobody should not keep a recond on social media and internet. In this competitive world, if a compeny wish to progress and be the first in the world, they should not allow their employees to issue information on Internet. For instance, when I was working at Google compeny, I was a manager who had important and critical information about Google. One day, I decided to put my office picture on Instagram to show other people how much I was elite person. Suddenly, all news started to talk about that picture because in photo there were some papers which demonstrated how much money Google earn from individuals. Therefore, the police arrested me and suspected Google becaue of the amount of money. As you can see, publishing vital information can eradicate a company.
In conclusion, not keeping a record on website has more beneficail effect than creaing the record. Publishing the information not only can destory life of someone, but also can break down a big compeny. All people should try to keep their private picture and information with their own instead of publishing on Internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'believe'.
Suggestion: believe
...ay or in negative way. Some individuals believes that everyone should upload their own e...
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Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a record' or simply 'records'?
Suggestion: a record; records
... prefer save my privacy and do not make a records for two essential reasons. First and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96705882353 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68716390028 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550588235294 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0619083356 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.7826086957 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4782608696 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91304347826 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301209372669 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802473426511 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737242509454 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195922821281 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449912388492 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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