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Visiting museums is the best way to learn a country.

Museums are vital parts of every society. All countries try to maintain and show their history in museums where are special place for connecting different generation to each other. Some people believe that the best way to get information a country is going and visiting museums, while others disagree. In my view, I think people should go museums to know more about a country for two important reasons which I will elaborate in following paragraphs.
First and foremost, individuals can be familiar with a country by visiting museums because there are collected a lot of art work from different culture. Each society consist of various people who live in different places. Actually, the best way to show to others how different persons’ lifestyle, art or culture is to collect all of their artifacts and objects into museums. For example, a few years ago, one of my Canadian friend came to Iran to investigate about Iranian people’ culture which was so varied. Indeed, Iran contained about fifty different civilization. In Iran, there have been several national museums which are so large to exhibit all people’s cultures. We went to Saadat Abad museums which was the most famous one because there were some narratives who explained the details of every object. He was so surprised since he could learn about Iran quickly only by visiting one place. This experience shows me, if we want to show our culture to foreign persons, we should show them our museums.
Second, the best place for learning about history of a county is visiting museums. Every county try to save their history for not only their people but also for other country. In fact, they want to show how much they were powerful. So, Governments create museums to demonstrate their power in the world. For example, Iran’s age is about 2000 years old which is the oldest country in the world. In the past, people in Iran lived in different styles like sedentary or moving around to survive. Also, people’s residue show that they made a lot of weapon and pottery which preserve in museums in Iran. Actually, when everyone see these articles, they notice that how much Iranian people were intelligent and powerful to make them. As you can see, museums are the best place to show the history of a country.
In conclusion, the best way to get information about a country is visiting museums because people not only can learn about history and know different culture of the county. Government should support museum to hold objects in high quality condition.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ple should go museums to know more about a country for two important reasons whic...
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Line 3, column 535, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun weapon seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of weapons'.
Suggestion: a lot of weapons
...o, people’s residue show that they made a lot of weapon and pottery which preserve in museums i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92505854801 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50164017737 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496487119438 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8787333725 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.625 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7916666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45833333333 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302381882096 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916808344695 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100667974765 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251735385846 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0928118330051 0.0645574589148 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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