It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
Failure is a vital par of every person. During the life time, individuals encounter different situation and learn valuable experience whether they success or fail. Some people believes that success is important thing when they fail, while others disagree. In my view, remaining happy and optimistic is more essential than being successful when I fail for two critical reasons which I elaborate them in following paragraphs.
First and foremost, being happy helps people to make a good decision when they fail. In competitive world, people face predicament situation during their life and they have to be rational in hard condition such as failure. When they try to be happy and glad in hard circumstances, their brain work properly to decide which solution is the best. For example, when I was at university, I was a negative person who lost his passion and concentration when failed. During preparation for final exams, I lost my laptop which it caused me to be sad and did not study my courses very well. Because I was so sad, I spent my energy to think about my laptop which was not as important as my exams. I decided to look for another laptop instead of studying. Therefore, I failed to pass the courses and had to stay one year more to graduate. This experience shows me, If I tried to be happy when I lost my laptop, I could focus on my courses and pass them.
second, being happy help persons to be healthy when they fail. By population growth, people now compete to each other to keep and find a job which can hurt their health. Under this stressful life, if they do not live in happy way, their health will be harmed seriously. For instance, after graduation from university, I searched every company to find the best job for myself. I was under serious pressure due to money which was so crucial to live. Because a lot of people was looking the job, I lost my hope about my future. So, I became so sad and felt depression which cause me to lose my friend who were the important part of my life. Therefore, I destroyed not only mental health but also physical health which made me as ill person. As you can see, If I was happy in finding job, I would be healthier life.
In conclusion, remaining happy is the most important thing when people fail. Being happy help them not only to make a good decision but also be healthy. All individuals should pay more attention on their lifestyle to be more happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...a vital par of every person. During the life time, individuals encounter different situat...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...uld focus on my courses and pass them. second, being happy help persons to be healthy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58660508083 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52115308893 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512702078522 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4737401895 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.44 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.32 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220976609867 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749908240452 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956769719526 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184786553759 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0877934450989 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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