High salaries with high risks of losing a job or a secure job with a low salary
Occupation, the foundation of people's daily lives, has been valued and triggers heated discussion over whether it is sensible to choose a high-paid job with a high risk of losing job. A low salary but secure job, in some people's view, is definitely better. On the contrary, my perspective is that we should better choose high salaries with high risks of losing jobs, due to the improvement of living standards and personal development.
To begin with, never should we ignore the positive effect of a high salary on people's life, including personal life and the whole family. Obviously, with more money earned, people are more likely to purchase more things to improve their living standards. For example, they can taste delicious but expensive food frequently, go traveling every month, or watch movies every week, making their lives colorful and enjoyable. However, if people choose a low-paid career, they may not have the competence to afford such living standards. Besides, by taking a rewarding job, people will also give their family a better life, compared with those who choose a low-paid career. It is well-acknowledged that most people work in order to support the whole family. The more money they earned, the more likely they will provide their older parents with constant medical care, and give their children access to a well-rounded education. In contrast, people who get low salaries may find it laborious to sustain the whole family, not to mention a better life quality.
In addition, even if the job is not secure, people are able to lower the risk of losing that job. This can motivate them to work diligently to improve themselves. To be more specific, in order to not be fired by the company, people who choose high-risk job will try their best to learn more knowledge and skills. For instance, people may learn some programming skills to improve their work productivity, so they can finish the assigned tasks efficiently. People will not have such stimulation if their job is secure, since even if their work efficiency is tremendously low, they will not lose that job. Besides, people may try to build a harmonious relationship with more people outside the company, so that they can find a new job quickly. For example, they will communicate with employees from different kinds of fields, and exchange information about their occupations.
In conclusion, a rewarding but not secure job is better, because it can improve the living standard and benefit personal development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10411622276 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69619956823 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486682808717 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7479250151 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.947368421 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7368421053 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356917940643 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124826893484 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112455744761 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263469355499 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179382707691 0.0645574589148 278% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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