A high salary or an interested job
There is no doubt that nowadays, having a proper job is one of the most concerns among people. There are several features which make a job attractive for individuals. There is no secret that one of these attributes is having a high salary. Some people believe that having high salary is the most crucial factor for choosing a job, even if we do not interested in that career, while I am of the opinion that having a challenging and interesting job outweigh its salary. There are numerous grounds, two of which I will explore in what follows.
The first noteworthy point which bears in mind is that by having an exciting job, there is more chance for a person to be prosperous. In the way of illustration, when a person likes his job , and its attractive for him, he would work more diligently; as a consequence, it is more likely this person progress in his work quickly. My older sister's experience is a compelling example of this. When she was a 20-year-old girl, she worked in his professor's company as an architect. Since she was very enthusiastic about his work in that famous company, she every day went to work early in the morning and got back home late at night. Even though, her boss did not pay that much, she worked very well due to her passion for that career which was very exciting for her. After a while, she became very successful in her field that several companies offered her better positons. Had she did a boring but high-paid job, she would not have been such a successful person now.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that if we choose our favorite career, we can earn a large amount of money during the time. On other words, when we like our job, we work harder; as a result, we could earn more money. Besides, when a person, for instance, works on a boring project, it is more likely to give up with every little problems happening during the project. No one can deny the fact that the more a person likes his job, the more he could earn money from that job. For example, I am very eager about my work in laboratory. However, my salary is not that much. Since I always liked my work, I do my job very well and always study any new article about my work. Accordingly, having enough knowledge about my work enabled me to hold several workshop to convey my information to other interested people, and earn extra money as well. My example demonstrate, when individuals are interested in their career, they would earn lots of money readily.
On the whole, based on the points mentioned above, we can safely conclude that by working on an interesting and challenging work, we could not only progress in our work but also earn adequate amount of money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... make a job attractive for individuals. There is no secret that one of these attribut...
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Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...llustration, when a person likes his job , and its attractive for him, he would wo...
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Line 3, column 879, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...es offered her better positons. Had she did a boring but high-paid job, she would n...
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Line 5, column 761, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun workshop seems to be countable; consider using: 'several workshops'.
Suggestion: several workshops
...wledge about my work enabled me to hold several workshop to convey my information to other inter...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, no doubt, as a result, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54004106776 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47776239176 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482546201232 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 3.51792114695 370% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1250862806 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1304347826 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1739130435 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2097926187 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064012533818 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724715395614 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139315432387 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794362960056 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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