it is obvious that it is important for students specially high school students to spend their free time doing activities which will be useful for their future life. According to the fact that one of the challenges that these students will face is to decide to choose a proper major of study at university, I strongly believe that it is much better for them to take a course related to the major that they are intending to select after finishing their high school. In the following paragraphs I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think participating in classes in which they can study a subject which they are considering selecting as their major at university will help them to get some required information about their major. As a result, they will able to choose a major with enough awareness because of the fact that selecting a major is a crucial decision that juveniles make in their life. In other words, it will directly affect their future job; therefore, it is of paramount importance. For example, I had such valuable experience in my high school. I was interested in studying computer engineering at university and took a course about introduction to computer science at my high school in summer which would be beneficial for me and I became familiar with some computer skills.
I believe that traveling to museums and historic places are activities which students can experience with their family members or friends on their vacations, while only schools can give children a good opportunity to study a course related to their future major. They cannot get such invaluable experience in other places.
To sum up, in my point of view, attending in classes in which students are able to take courses regarding their major will not only help them to learn new thing and to improve their knowledge but also prepare them to make better decisions when they are trying to select a major. In addition, taking a trip to museums or other places prevents them from utilizing their time in the best way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it is obvious that it is important for stu...
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Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...to choose a major with enough awareness because of the fact that selecting a major is a crucial decision...
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Line 7, column 391, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m utilizing their time in the best way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83667621777 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60842577536 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47564469914 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.2206972456 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.666666667 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0833333333 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144465810458 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618931178914 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592880277948 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997053706347 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049023045614 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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