humans challenges while going to the Mars
Both the reading and the lecture are about hamans going to the Mars. The athor of the reading feels that there are three reasons for the assertion that it is impossible for humans to get to the Mars and use it's resourses; however, the professor finds the idea dubious and cast doubt on the reasons proposed by the writer of the text.
To begin with, the author mentions that it is impossible to make use of the resourses of the Mars, for the cargo capacity of space vehicles is too limited to put on board the food, water and oxygen required by the crew. This specific argument is challenged by the speaker. He brings up the idea that if the astronauts make use of the hydroponics technique, it is possible to make get enough supplies. He elaborates on this by saying that in this tecnique, the root of the plant is in the water and by using this technique the astronauts can easily plant crops and cultivate their needed food. furthermore he asserts that by doing such a thing they would recycle their water in order to make it edible and finally these plants can make oxygen for the crew too.
Secondly, the writer holds up the view that it is impossible for the crew not to experience grave medical problems while taking this trip for spending a lot of time in the zero-gravity environment has negative effects on human's body, such as decreased muscle mass and lost bone density. In contrast, the lecturer rebuts this reason by underlying the fact that astronauts already experienced such a thing when they were in the space stations for a couple of months. Additionally, he states that they use a couple of techniques to solve these potential problems such as daily exercise and using minerals and supplements so as to preserve their bone density and muscle mass.
Finally, the author posits that astronauts will be exposed to dangerous levels of space radiation and there is not much to do about it, for building an instrument to shield them would add lots of weight to the spaceship. On the contrary, the professor dismisses this issue due to the fact that these dangerous space radiations happen occasionally and not always. Moreover, he claims that they can make use of an instrument, which detects these radiations and makes a shielded area, which does not add too much weight. by using this apparatus, when radiations are coming, the crew would be informed and they would go to the small shielded area.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
... crops and cultivate their needed food. furthermore he asserts that by doing such a thing t...
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Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: furthermore,
... crops and cultivate their needed food. furthermore he asserts that by doing such a thing t...
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Line 5, column 619, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...cise and using minerals and supplements so as to preserve their bone density and muscle ...
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Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
... radiations happen occasionally and not always. Moreover, he claims that they can make...
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Line 7, column 519, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...ea, which does not add too much weight. by using this apparatus, when radiations a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, as to, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70518867925 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52424607808 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481132075472 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5178349017 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.5 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2857142857 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0828043378059 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315784264969 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437142976717 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0553255247994 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459733981712 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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