Without any doubt, in today's world, having a job is an inseparable part of every individual's life. Although many people strive to settle in a secure job, I personally believe that security should not be considered as the highest priority factor in finding a suitable job. There are many reasons for that, among which living a happy life and making progress in work are the most noticeable ones.
To begin with, I quick to point out that the lives we live are shorter than we think. Wouldn't it be painful for old human beings to look back through their life and notice that they paid the least attention to happiness and lost it among the daily struggles of mundane, modern life? To support this claim, I should mention a relevant research which recently has been conducted among the elderly in order to find out what did they consider as the most feature of life if they had a chance to live as a youth again, and the answer was just one word: happiness. Additionally, it is crystal clear that job satisfaction has a strong positive influence on living happily. With all this taken into account, I stand by the opinion that the merits of having a secure, but unfavorable job, do not outweigh a happy life with a less secure, but more satisfactory job.
Secondly, if people truly want work prosperity and long-term achievements, they need to keep their motivation flying high for which job satisfaction is a necessary condition. This reminds me of a friend who left her secure job in order to follow her old dream of being a well-known painter, in a prestigious company in which she had been working for several years and had a great salary. Now, she earns even more money than before besides living her best life that she had always been dreaming, by following painting as her major field of professional life.
All in all, it can be concluded that while many people stick to their job and are afraid of moving toward a more satisfactory job due to possible risks of insecurity, some people do not sacrifice the chance of having a happier and more prosperous life juxtaposed with job satisfaction, and I, personally, subscribe to the chosen lifestyle of the latter group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...g a job is an inseparable part of every individuals life. Although many people strive to se...
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Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Wouldn't
...ives we live are shorter than we think. Wouldnt it be painful for old human beings to l...
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Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...e are shorter than we think. Wouldnt it be painful for old human beings to look ba...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69895287958 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60858193406 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568062827225 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.853328806 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.583333333 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281642092922 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104637939601 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686549528593 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187054306013 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346604087001 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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