If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying

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If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

Job is always one of the matters that people consider most in their lives. People find a job not for money only, also for their dreams or their promotion. Due to that reason, some people tend to wait for a satisfying job instead of getting a secure job when they have the opportunity. From my perspective, I disagree with this view for some reasons.
To begin with, getting a secure job when having a chance remains a stable financial situation. People don’t know how long it takes them to find a job that would be satisfying, especially in the pandemic but they still have to pay for their basic life needs such as food, the electric bill, house rents, etc during that time. The limited budget also forces them to narrow their spending on hobbies and social circles. That impacts seriously to mental health. This is based on my experience when I was unemployed.
In addition, when starting a new job, it is a challenge and the opportunity at the same time that stimulate people to improve the skills that are required in the new field, new working environment and also make life more colorful. These skills would be helpful for their satisfying job in the future.
In conclusion, I totally agree that people should take the job right away when the opportunity comes and keep working until they find the more satisfying job. When you have a chance and health, try to collect the lesson as much as you can.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... it takes them to find a job that would be satisfying, especially in the pandemic but they st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 251.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62948207171 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42854748592 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565737051793 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3291759222 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3846153846 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46462376927 0.236089414692 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150490399685 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141758840632 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275582865051 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580547723447 0.0645574589148 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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