If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
I strongly believe that choosing a career is one of the most crucial decision everybody make in his or life. The job that we choose influences us for the rest of our life in terms of the amount of money we earn, the impact on our personality in society, the style of our living, the name but a few. When it comes to choose an opportunity between getting a more stable job or more satisfying job, people differ greatly in their attitudes toward this issue. As fa as I am concerned, I agree with this statement that people should take a job that they are more satisfying with. In the following, I will try to explain the specific reasons which I think are the most common viewpoints nowadays.
To begin with, people who love their jobs do their best to make a difference in the world. In other words, these people try to make progress through their working life. They try to improve the situation which live in now. For example, my brother chose to became a teacher while the whole family wanted him to became a doctor. He said he loves being a person who teach in school. In that time, we all though he made a wrong derision but few years later he proved us wrong. He wrote two books about teaching which nominated as the best book of that year and by the Ministry of Education, he was chosen as a best teacher of our province at the very same year, as well. I think my brother became a successful teacher because of his loves for things he is doing.
Another equally notable point supporting my opinion is that suitable career is closely related to one's satisfying with his or her lives. It is obviously clear that the more people satisfying with their jobs, the more they enjoy their lives. For instance, my friend took a job in a factory which he never liked it. The reason that he got the job had something with its payment. But few years later when I met him in a party he looked like an old man. He frustrated by the job. I think he barley enjoy his life because of the unsatisfying with the job.
To sum up, by taking into account all the above factors, we may reach the conclusion that people should take a job that they are more satisfying with due to their possible progressing and their having more enjoyable life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37831325301 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33616415111 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510843373494 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0302327021 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5238095238 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25389021389 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810702754593 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876152444748 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186604157314 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795598704805 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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