If people have the opportunity to have a secure job, they have it right away, or they should wait for a satisfying one
In the last three decades, the job market has changed drastically. Some people prefer to wait for a dreamed job; however, others believe that if they have the chance to get a secure job, they have to get it right away. From a personal perspective, the latter point of view carries more weight, given that having a secure job has a positive impact on people's experience and financial situation. Below I will strive to explain my supporting points in more detail.
The first and foremost point, provided that people get a secure job, they could enhance their experience. To put it in other words, they will have the ability to amplify their thinking and expand their horizons. a vivid example that could be given to shed light on what was stated above is, five years ago, I immigrated form my country, which was Egypt, to Canada. I did not have the authorization to work in my career since I have to study to get my license. Thus, I worked as a pharmacy assistance until I finished my studying, which augmented my experience and helped me to discover my career path. Furthermore, working in a pharmacy gave me the opportunity to deal with Canadians, so I gained the fundamental North American Experience, which was very beneficial for me. Consequently, having a secure job is imperative to boost experience.
Next coupled with experience, better financial situation is another exquisite point that should be born in mind. To be more elucidate, life, nowadays, has become very expensive; hence, working is not optional anymore. If people do not work and wait for a satisfying job, they cannot afford the high cost of living. For instance, ten years ago, the housing cost in California has increased dramatically, so people have to work to earn money for their expenses. In addition to that, the job market has become very competitive, so having a secure job is essential.
Taking everything into consideration, without a doubt, People should have a secure job rather than waiting for a satisfying one. I suggested that people compromise and ensure that they attain a satisfying job, yet a secure one.
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...ain a satisfying job, yet a secure one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87709497207 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77918923876 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530726256983 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9108879128 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508381881278 0.236089414692 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161254288632 0.076458572812 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146034225799 0.0737576698707 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.353219601145 0.150856017488 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104147455121 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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