If You could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you changes?? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
It is a widely supported truth that human effort is trying out on our world to make it a charismatic dwelling place. Likewise, I’m always devoted to my hometown so that I can wipe out some darkness from here and turn this arena into a safe and modern living region. From this sense of humor, I think if I get some catylist to change one important thing, of course, it would be the educational system of the home town as well as community. My next sentences will explore what notable changes I would bring in educational system.
First and foremost, a closer look at the school educational system of my city shows that educational system offers here only bookish knowledge, paper based exams, traditional home works for students which create lots of mental and physical pressures. It hampers their physical accretion despite our guardians are enforcing their children towards these competitive studies, as a result, the students are losing their creative passions and getting frustrated. I want to change the view of guardians so that they allow their kids to have a company with friends, participate in drawing, painting, sporting activities because these growing kids need an open environment to suit for convoluted society. It will subconsciously train them about teamwork, self-learning, and decision making.
Secondly, I would emphasize on extra-curricular activities as the compulsory of school learning which my hometown barely cares about. The complex studies in the school with huge sum of assignments are deviating these students to discover their own capabilities, ideas and thinking. For example, if a boy doesnt participate in watching movies, painting, singing and to name a few, instead he just focuses on the school works and assignments, his cognitive circle will be fixed within a short boundary. Moreover, I want to impart some scientific projects for enthusiastic students as a part of their learning process. Similarly, I want to arrange some art cultural houses for the students who are passionate to think freely about history, art, culture and politics.
Furthermore, this era introduces us with some new electronic devices, I want to imply these technologies for the students. When a student needs some extra time for learning, he can contact to the popular tutors over internet connection, I want to ensure this. I’m inspired by the developed nations like United States, China, India who are evaluating their young kids, teenage, youths in multidimensional educational process rather than creating pressures for the tradition schooling.
In conclusion, the aforesaid implementation system of education is a basic need for a newly born babies and current students however, my hometown is far away from these activities. The conventional learning has some negative consequence as example, we cannot improve our traffic system, health issues, environmental safety. Therefore, research-based education in all discipline is now a basic need which provokes me to improve my home town educational procedure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, likewise, look, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, of course, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2571.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36743215031 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01141984066 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597077244259 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.9026598421 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.315789474 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78947368421 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0769340986263 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277257169706 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438256978764 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0457319702693 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540348710063 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 86.8835125448 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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