If you could change one thing about your life, what would you change? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
If I could change one thing about me, it would be to reduce my sleeping time. By doing ao, it would encourage me to focus better on my health, read more books, watch more movies, learn some new skills or continue to pursue my already existing hobbies.
I tend to sleep a lot (about 10- 15 hours per day). If I could control my sleep and try to diminish my sleeping time to about 7 - 8 hours a day, I would be able to pursue many more additional activities which currently I am only thinking of but unable to actually puruse it my real life. Firstly, I would be able to read more books. currently I read only about two books a year. However, if I change my habbit of excessive sleeping, I would be able to read about 6 to 10 books in a year. As a consequence, it would help me to enhance my domain of knowledge.
Second benefit is that I would be able spend more time on watching movies or pursue my other hobbies. For example, I love to paint. But, due to busy school schedule and excessive sleeping habit, I am hardly able to pursue this hobby of mine. Pursuing my hobby will not only not make me happy but also make my life much more meaningful. Therefore, I truly feel that if I change my sleeping habit, I would be achieve many more higher goals in my life.
Lastly, it will also encourage me to lead a healthy life. Currently, I am apathetic towards the physical exercises and eating healthy food. If I wake up early in the morning, I can utlisize this time towards ameliorating my health. I can do some yoga, some workout exercises or at least practice some meditation. This would not only help me in enhancing my productivity in proffesional life but also add value to my personal life. Hence, I subscribe to my viewpoint that by controlling my bad habit of sleeping excessively, it would help me cut down my superfluous time and motivate me to utilize that time in something productive.
Above illustrations bolsters my opinion of changing one thing about my life that could result into various fruitful benefits. If you are able to achieve so just by giving up one bad habit, don't you think it's worth a try?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Currently
...ly, I would be able to read more books. currently I read only about two books a year. How...
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Message: Use only 'higher' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: higher
...sleeping habit, I would be achieve many more higher goals in my life. Lastly, it will also...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...eve so just by giving up one bad habit, dont you think its worth a try?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, second, so, therefore, at least, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3893129771 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57996016237 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496183206107 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1650789633 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1428571429 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149837323228 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590580629343 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677597862804 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119207986572 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717826259865 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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