Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We always love to watch something that would elicit awe of us, don’t we? One of the many activities that sends the chills to our spine is dangerous sports activities. Although many people find it to be interesting, I personally feel such activities shall be discontinued.
With the advent of social networking platforms, many people have entered into the rat race of gaining as many followers as they could. In order to achieve this, they sometimes resort to many dangerous activities. Around 2 years back, when I was returning from college, I saw one boy, probably in his mid twenties walking on the roof of a running train while his other friends were shooting his video in their mobile phone. Luckily there was no mishap on that day, however if he would have lost his balance; it would have been resulted into an accident probably costing nothing less than boy’s life. I feel this kind of stunts sends out wrong message in our society and should be refrained from supporting such activities.
Furthermore, these risky activities would set an inappropriate example for today’s youth. Nowadays I could see many millenials riding their bike on single wheel. In fact in many places, there bikes races on single wheel are organized. Since, these sports are getting more attractions, many people are trying this kind of dangerous sports which thereby results in an unfortunate and tragedic accidents. Thus, support for these kind of sports activities shall be ceased.
In many countries, dangerous sports are organized every year as part of their cultural tradition. For example, Spain organizes bull run every year as part of their tradition in which the bulls are set free to run on roads and the participants on the road have to defend themselves from gigantic bulls. This race had lead to gruesome injuries and in some cases even the death of participants. This loss is highly unbearable epecially by the family members. Hence, I would strongly suggest to organizing and supporting these kinds of sports even though it is a part of cultural tradition.
Based on above illustartions, I would highly recommend to discourage dangerous sports and activities. Wouldn’t it be wise to live a happy life with loved ones instead of pleasing the followers on socail media?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'had lost'?
Suggestion: had lost
...as no mishap on that day, however if he would have lost his balance; it would have been resulte...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...d tragedic accidents. Thus, support for these kind of sports activities shall be ceased. ...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'leaded', 'led'.
Suggestion: leaded; led
...lves from gigantic bulls. This race had lead to gruesome injuries and in some cases ...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend discouraging'.
Suggestion: recommend discouraging
... on above illustartions, I would highly recommend to discourage dangerous sports and activities. Wouldn...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, while, for example, i feel, in fact, kind of, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01055408971 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70439152935 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575197889182 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5619099673 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.95 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151887613976 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512249852306 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522163516698 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0901455537547 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313058430097 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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