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Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are many different kinds of sports that are practiced all over the world. Some are dangerous, such as box, base jumping, or mountain alpinism, while others are much safer, such as football, volleyball, or swimming. The answer to why some people choose the former types of sports over the latter is solely related to the person’s interests and motivation, even though there may be found more general patterns.
To begin with, people that decide to practice dangerous sports usually want to get a good amount of the adrenaline hormone from it and have some diversity in their 9 to 5 and 5/2 lifestyle routine. It is not a secret that the adrenaline rush they experience is highly addictive, otherwise, there would not be so many amateurs practicing dangerous activities and the queues for Russian mountains would be non-existent. Drawing from my own experience, the overwhelming emotions you get from doing dangerous activities are hard to imitate in other ways. I have jumped from a plane with a parachute myself and for this reason, I can wholeheartedly confirm this gave me a feeling of being alive, something I did not experience for a long time.
Secondly, dangerous sports require skill, precision, and a lot of self-confidence. Many professional sportsmen, as well as amateurs, want to prove themselves they are worth something by practicing those uneasy sports. Whilst practicing them, you can rely only on yourself. You became the master of your fate. There is no better method to overcome anxiety and start believing in yourself than succeeding in a dangerous sport. A friend of mine is an amateur mountain alpinist. Last month she and his companion reached the peak of Mont Blanc. When I asked her about the risks, she told me the feeling of setting a goal and then achieving it are worth all of the dangers. Thanks to alpinism, she became more confident and has overcome her fear due to anxiety. It is certainly clear to see why some people are attracted to dangerous sports.
In conclusion, people are interested in dangerous activities because of the rush of adrenaline they experience, and due to personal reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 12, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
There are many different kinds of sports that are practiced all ...
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Line 4, column 638, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...of setting a goal and then achieving it are worth all of the dangers. Thanks to alp...
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Line 4, column 648, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... a goal and then achieving it are worth all of the dangers. Thanks to alpinism, she became...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99162011173 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84043602974 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572625698324 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0568116789 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2777777778 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287555761893 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803781783423 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767595776872 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156943099519 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187099643758 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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