Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these
situations do you think is better?
There is no shortage of opinion on what is better for young adults: to live with their families for a longer time or apart from them. In my opinion, living apart from their parents is better for the young, as it will help them to become more responsible and independent, thus introducing them to adulthood. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, living apart is the first step to the independence that the young adults always wish for. When you live on your own or with some peer roommate, your parents are not there for you. Therefore, you begin to take care of yourself by doing the cooking, the cleaning, by managing your finances, everything on your own. You either pursue your further education studies, or you start working and making the necessary decisions. There is nobody to control you, and with time, you accept your new responsibilities, and thus, become more mature. Drawing from my experience, I can say that moving out from my parents was definitely the right move in order to gain some independence. For the first time I started taking my own decisions, as well as accepting the consequences. In order to survive, I learned how to cook, how to sew and how to change a screw when needed. For this reason, I think that young people should move out of their parents’ house.
Secondly, there is no better way to get out of your comfort zone than moving out. In your new environment, you can become whoever you always wanted to be. You start making new friends and meeting new people that you did not have the occasion to meet before. Moreover, you become more socially adapted. My friend’s experience is a perfect example for this. When he was living with his family, he used to be shy and had social anxiety. His parents always told him he was a failure. When we finally agreed to move in a new flat together, his life changed drastically. He became a new person, in a better way. All thanks to the fact that he escaped from his parents’ surveillance and their toxic behavior. It’s certainly clear to see why some people decide to leave their family houses as soon as they turn the legal age to do so.
In conclusion, I think it is better for the young adults to move out of their parents’ houses if they want to become more independent or if they want to get out of their comfort zone and become the best version of themselves.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, apart from, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55733944954 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55145989689 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495412844037 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.846065192 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7916666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37816878122 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101503767187 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931304735505 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249457102838 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574856571059 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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