If you could create a new invention, what product would you make?
Use specific details to explain why this invention is necessary.
If I could create a new invention, I would definitely create the personal flying machine.
I had a lot of dreams, but my most desirable one is to fly freely and comfortably in the clear blue sky, and so if I could create a new invention, I would definitely create the personal flying machine.
People have long dreamed of flying in the sky since ancient times, and certainly, with the advancement of technology, people have partially fulfilled this long-term desire by creating a lot of different kinds of airplanes and jets. Nonetheless, instead of an airplane that I will need to procure a ticket and go to an airport to take, I want to have a personal flying machine that is as convenient as driving a car. This flying machine will be extremely valuable to me and humanity, as I shall discuss below.
Motivated by the pursuit of traveling across the globe, I want to have a personal flying machine. In this way, I am able to cross the high mountains and wide rivers at ease, getting to any out-of-the-road destinations where cars and airplanes don't have access to instantly. Moreover, this machine will enable me to enjoy the gorgeous scenery with a bird's-eye-view, which will be an exceptionally incredible experience for a terrestrial creature like me. For example, I can utilize the flying machine to fly across the amazing Great Canyon or view the beautiful night in Hong Kong.
Besides personal benefits, I believe that a flying machine can benefit humanity as a whole, especially in emergencies. When a house is on fire, it is often difficult for the firefighters to come to the rescue if the floor is too high. Nevertheless, if the firefighters can use a flying machine, they can reach a very high place and save more people. In addition to the fire situation, flying machines are also a practical tool for rescuing people in the water. I have seen so many scenes of a person stuck in the middle of a rapid river on television, and these scenes depress me a lot. The rescue team doesn't have access to the person. Therefore, they have to watch the water divulge the person just in front of their eyes. I believe that we can reverse this situation by equipping the rescue teams with flying machines.
Every day, people come up with plenty of new ideas and inventions to fulfill humanity's wildest dreams. However, I truly believe that among all the dreams, gaining control over the sky is arguably the most profound one. Consequently, I believe that the personal flying machine can not only fulfill my dream but also change the course of history.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...ar blue sky, and so if I could create a new invention, I would definitely create the personal...
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Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...d destinations where cars and airplanes dont have access to instantly. Moreover, thi...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cenes depress me a lot. The rescue team doesnt have access to the person. Therefore, t...
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Line 9, column 78, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'humanitys the wildest'.
Suggestion: humanitys the wildest
... of new ideas and inventions to fulfill humanitys wildest dreams. However, I truly believe that a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, therefore, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74245939675 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77358175385 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533642691415 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9069779725 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.578947368 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194141127061 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559742572965 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610041667082 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124250643777 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0839066496888 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.