If you could create a new invention, what product would you make?
Use specific details to explain why this invention is necessary.
I had a lot of dreams, but my most desirable one is to fly freely and comfortably in the clear blue sky, and so if I could create a new invention, I would definitely create a personal flying machine.
People have long dreamed of flying in the sky since ancient times, and certainly, with the advancement of technology, people have partially fulfilled this long-term desire by creating a lot of different kinds of airplanes and jets. Nonetheless, instead of an airplane that I will need to procure a ticket and go to an airport to take, I want to have a personal flying machine which can be used as conveniently as driving a car. This personal flying machine will be extremely valuable to me and to the humanity, as I shall discuss below.
Motivated by the pursuit of traveling all over the world, I want to have a personal flying machine. In this way, I am able to cross the high mountains and wide rivers at ease, getting to any out-of-the-road destinations where cars and airplanes don’t have access to instantly. Moreover, this machine will enable me to enjoy the gorgeous scenery with a bird’s-eye-view, which will be a very incredible experience for a terrestrial creature such as me. For example, I can utilize the flying machine to fly across the amazing Great Canyon or view the beautiful night in Hong Kong.
Besides personal benefits, I believe that a flying machine can benefit the humanity as a whole, especially in emergencies. When a house is on fire, it is often difficult for the firefighters to come to rescue if the floor is too high. Nevertheless, if the firefighters can use a flying machine, they can reach a very high place and save more people. In addition to the fire situation, flying machines are also a wonderful tool for rescuing people in the water. I have seen so many times on the television that a person is stuck in the middle of a rapid river, and the rescue team don’t have access to the person, so they have no choice but to watch the person be divulged by the water just in front of their eyes. I am very depressed when watching these scenes, and I believe that this kind of situation can be reversed if the rescue team is equipped with flying machines.
Every day, people propose plenty of new ideas and create lots of inventions to fulfill humanity’s wildest dreams. However, I truly believe that among all the ideas and inventions, gaining control over the sky is arguably the most profound one, and a personal flying machine can not only fulfill my dream but also change the course of history.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...ar blue sky, and so if I could create a new invention, I would definitely create a personal f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, for example, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66962305987 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76626889467 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.8632113261 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.625 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1875 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0704212340771 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270173910373 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385700051462 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0540933560728 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355943475711 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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