If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why?
If one day I have a chance to meet a famous person, I would like to be introduced to Michael Jordan. While I was a teenager, Jordan had an impressive development as an athlete. Making marvelous games during the 90’s, Michael got millions of fans in Brazil, and I was one of them.
When we have to choose good characteristics in a person, I have to say that integrity, responsability, and loyality are the most important. Mixing all this adjectives, we can make a fantastic personality to be a champion.
First, the number 23 of Chicago Bulls was always a correct person. By playing without make anyone angry with him, Jordan was respected for everybody. Even been the best player for many years, he shared the glory with all team. And in the end of each championship, he said that he was just one of them.
Second, Michael trained a lot during his professional life. Differently from other players that did not have responsability, Jordan was always present for the trainaments and gave his best. Absolutely this is how a true champion works. Consequently, all team respected him and were supporting Jordan during the games.
Third, he played for Chicago Bulls for a long time. Sometimes we see players changing their teams every season. But Jordan was different. He made all his fans proud of him and always put Bulls’ team in the first place.
Additionaly, if I have a chance to ask him a question, I would like to know which kind of advice a real champion can give to make us as good as he was?
To conclude, Michael Jordan would be my choice as an example of famous person. Having a great life as a competitor, he was a correct person, responsable, and loyal to his colegues at Chicago Bulls.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, so, third, while, kind of, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1404.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63366336634 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82204271856 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551155115512 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0819481371 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.2 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.15 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0988030749345 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335917636912 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611153179205 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595001284903 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516904721273 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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