If you give friends a way to reduce living expenses :
1. Find a roommate sharing
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy less Frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
Which way you will recommend to your friend and why?
Due to a high level of consumptions, young people can often find themselves stuck in financial deficit. In this case, how to cut down living expenses obviously becomes an important problem. Some say they may change their mobile phone in a much lower frequency while others propose that they are more willing to cook by themselves in order to save money. However, I consider renting an apartment with a roommate can be the best solution. My viewpoint is based on the following reasons and examples.
To begin with, living with a roommate can help us save much more money than cutting down costs in bought new electric devices or cooking at home. The expense of house renting is higher than the money spending on eating stuff or purchasing a mobile phone. Take the young working in Shanghai as an example. Renting fees in Shanghai can reach 5,000 RMB to 7000 RMB on average if young people want to live in some convenient sectors rather than in some remote areas. If they find a roommate and get the rent shared, he or she can save at least 2,500 RMB per month. When it comes to saving money by stop buying a new mobile phone or quitting eating outside, one may only save several hundred RMB RMB one month. So it will be much more effective if one find a roommate to reduce his or her costs on renting than on cellphone or food.
In addition, living with another individual can not only lesson one's financial pressure in renting fees but also save money in other aspects. Roommates can share furniture or tools together. For example, when I was just graduate from university, I choose to rent with when we both moved into our new apartment from our dormitory, the first thing we need to deal with was to buy some necessary items such as cooking pot and sofa, for the house we rent was almost empty-there were only two beds in it. I felt very lucky that I decided to live with another girl rather than living by myself because I had not to pay all the expenses of buying this equipment myself. Sharing that expenditure with my roommate effectively lessened my financial burden.
Admittedly, living with another person can lead to some problems. Sometimes, we may encounter with roommates who are quite annoying, like he or she may have several friends singing and dancing in her room till midnight, which will disturb us a lot. Different life Nevertheless, this kind of terrible situation can be prevented from careful collecting information of our roommates before we make the decision of renting a house with him or her. If we deliberately choose the individual who owns a similar living habit as ours, most of the unsatisfactory cases can be avoided ahead of time.
To sum up, compared with keeping using old cellphone and cooking by ourselves, living with a roommate is the best solution when young people want to cut down their expenses. Having another people living with us can share renting fees as well as other various kinds of costs. Although it may lead to some inconvenience, we can effectively eliminate these drawbacks by observing and communicating with our potential roommates before we finally pick up the one we are most likely to get along well with.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 687, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: RMB
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, as to, at least, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2617.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70683453237 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54427374526 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505395683453 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.565775385 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.041666667 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.20833333333 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125900512633 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406572813294 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301810828433 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761932262214 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288622701369 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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